Friday, November 20, 2009

Forest

I am in a forest. I see trees, great tall giant pines. I cannot see anything but trees everywhere I look, only green and brown. But I can hear so much more. I hear the rushing waters of a stream nearby. Birds up in the treetops chirping softly. It's quiet. I am the only one here, but I don't even worry about finding my way out.
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5 comments:

  1. The Slay PoetNovember 24, 2009 at 11:58 AM

    Really good description Cara but I feel that it was cut too short. To make it better I think you should continue this on into a story.

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  2. CaitlinNovember 28, 2009 at 3:03 PM

    I like this a lot Cara. I like how the it ended

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  3. Alyssa MNovember 29, 2009 at 12:43 AM

    This paints a picture in my head. You did good with describing the scene around. I think that maybe you could try something else at the beginning to draw the reader in more, something to set off the mood with a real bang. =)

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  4. Delaney McCabeNovember 29, 2009 at 8:13 PM

    Good job describing it and I agree with Caitlin it was a great way to end it, and it in my mind after the first sentence it changed directions, because I thought it would be kind of scary with you being alone in the forest, but then it turns out to be a very calming story. Well written!

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  5. UnknownDecember 3, 2009 at 9:04 AM

    This is really nice. It leaves me wanting more, like it's the start to a really cool story or something.

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